Reflection--Process of Revision



In all of my essays I had to revise for new ideas. I used several of my craft lessons to put in new adjectives and especially elimenate passive voice. One example of me elimenating passive voice can be found in my scarlet letter essay. http://natalierocksyoursocksoff.blogspot.com/2007/10/scarlet-letter-natalie-royals-one-part.html On this essay I had writtn "We also see that because Roger Chillingworth did not." In this sentance I was not using present tense so I had to go back and edit it so it became "We also see that because Roger Chillingworth does not." I also used the exended metaphor for my crucible essay. http://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=dc54h7ch_6dbb3nr&hl=en. In this essay I compared Elizabeth to a shoe through out it creating and extended metahphor. I also revised my paper to clarify confusing lines and awkward sentances. I also decided to re edit my Nature walk essay. In this essay I had to revise, I added much more descriptions about the woods. I also put a thesis statement in. Upon revising I found multiple comma errors which I had to go back and correct. "Arriving in the woods, I found a hot sticky mess." In this sentance I had to add a comma between woods and the I. I also had to delete several words that didn't make since in the progression of it like also and that. I had to fix run on sentences to either to seperate sentences or use comma rules. I had some repeated words that I had to delete because I had accidently added them. http://natalierocksyoursocksoff.blogspot.com/2007/10/nature-essay-mrs.htmlOverall I found my revising effective and worth my time because of the numerous errors I found.